Turbulent Trials

[Anime Monster]

You knew I was going to write about this when the contest came up, didn't you?

Turbulent Trials

The sky darkens
The rain begins to
Fall

Black turn to green
The sun shows for a
Moment

The black abbess of
The sky as the sun
Hides

The cone of silence
Matching the swirling
Sky

Dropping lower is
The swirling sky of
Doom

Touchdown, a landing
Dust clouds form
Below

Bigger and strong
It grows so
Powerful

Destroying everything
Until everything is
Gone

Swirling blackness
Receding to the sky
Above

Leaving in its wake
Nothing, but
Survivors

[Lex]

Hmm.... its good, though I don't like the repetition of 'everything' in the eigth paragraph.

[Anime Monster]

It was the only word that allowed me to fit with the form. I could change it to:

Destroying everything
Until nothing is
Left

now that I think about it...but I think I'll leave it the way it is...maybe later, after this contest I'll publish an edited version using that as the eighth stanza.

[Wyvernwings]

It's lovely, I'm not formilar with that style though. Is it a named or were you just writing it as you thought of it?

[Anime Monster]

It's a freeform poem, but I put constraints that each stanza must be three lines long with the last line being one word and then centered so they kind of look like a tornado.

[Wyvernwings]

Ahh I see. That's cool, so you made it a sort of picture poem.

[Dreamer]

Very good!!! And freeform is one of my favorite to read... though I didn't like the eighth stanza either... But still, it was very good!

Nice job!!

~Anna Christie~