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Post by Anime Monster on Oct 22, 2005 18:44:55 GMT -5
i hate this computer it won't let me modifie anything!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11 So i will put the rating here and if anyone wants to do me a favor then they can modifie it for me Rating pg-M for violence and slight love sceance LUV AL I put it in there for you.
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Post by wirrawong on Oct 23, 2005 6:25:45 GMT -5
Interesting..... I would like to see more descriptions and punctuation and spelling is a must!!! but i don't need to tell u that:) It was pretty choppy, add more bulk to the story....that might work. It's an ok start for me wirrawong
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Post by alanna on Oct 23, 2005 11:48:44 GMT -5
Thank you Wirra you always have some way which i can better anything i do you take such good care of me and make sure i don't do anything wrong thaks MUMMY LUV AL
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Post by wirrawong on Oct 23, 2005 19:28:00 GMT -5
Thank you Wirra you always have some way which i can better anything i do you take such good care of me and make sure i don't do anything wrong thaks MUMMY LUV AL You know....I really hate it when she does that.......it's cute but it can get annoying.......it was just some constructive comments!!!!!!! for crying out aloud. You know what, I'll send you my HP story and you can see what I mean about bulk! wirrawong:)
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Post by alanna on Oct 24, 2005 3:17:16 GMT -5
i know how to Annoiy you wirra it is my speciality and it is tru what is said you do keep an eye on me. LUV AL
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Post by Lady Mage on Oct 24, 2005 20:07:05 GMT -5
I am SO sorry. I thought I fixed all the misspellings and quotation mark problems. Do you want me to fix it, or is your computer working again?
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Post by alanna on Oct 25, 2005 3:27:48 GMT -5
Nope Comp uter hates me Please could you fix it Mage LUV AL
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