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Post by larien on Dec 12, 2005 22:17:20 GMT -5
I think it's lovely M. You manage to tie the fic in with the song just well -- wasn't like you were writing the lyrics as prose, but they weren't just out there either. I especially liked the idea of having two generations go through this, but one manage to have it all work out right in the end. The very last scene was touching. We all forget about punctuation sometimes . . .  ~Larien |
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Post by Meluivan Indil on Dec 12, 2005 22:22:24 GMT -5
Thank you so much, hon. This song just managed to capture me, and the story was there. I had to tell it.
Yeah I haven't managed to confuse anyone with the two generations yet. I'm happy about it.
But I have a question for anyone reading it. Did anyone think that Reysa was the old woman's daughter at first? That's sort of how I was portraying it, so I could surprise everyone in the end with Kevin being her son. I was just wondering if I surprised anyone.
M.
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Post by LadyRiona on Dec 13, 2005 13:50:45 GMT -5
A little bit, lol. But after a bit, it was like 'Hmm...'
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Post by alanna on Dec 13, 2005 21:48:10 GMT -5
yea it was a bit hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
but it was a nice twist.
luv al
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Post by larien on Dec 13, 2005 22:28:38 GMT -5
I didn't really think that Reysa was the old woman's daughter, but I can see how someone might. It was kinda because you focused more on the little boy's emotions, and the fact that the old woman wanted him to have a happy family to love, not her.
I really enjoyed it though -- as I said last time.
luv.
~Larien
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Post by alanna on Dec 13, 2005 22:49:13 GMT -5
i also enjoyed it soo i won't throw something at you
heheheheheheh
LUV AL
ohhhh dear i have this lovely book in my hand with nothing to do with it ohhhhh dear what ever shall i do!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
A
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Post by Meluivan Indil on Dec 13, 2005 23:14:43 GMT -5
Thank you all very much, and Al go ahead and throw it. I promised you you could.
M.
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