White Dark

[silverflame]

Trees stained white,
Crystal branches reach for us.
I watched you breathe,
You ignored it all.

You watched
As I walked ahead,
Did you smile?
Or did it mean nothing?

I turned to look back,
My eyes met yours.
What did you see,
That made you look away?

We looked to the clouds,
Words you whispered
Were lost in the frozen air.
I never recieved them.

I hid in falling white,
It was never easy.
My fear was strong,
But you were stronger.

Now I sit and watch
As the ground glows and glitters.
The sun has gone,
I can no longer see your eyes.

[Meluivan Indil]

How do you do it? You always manage to mix melancholy with beauty, and it comes out as something magnificent.

I think I'll go cry now.

M.

[danteslover]

I'm impressed. It seems to me to referance Vergil, and it is creatively done in many ways. I should watch out now. I have an expert with poetry against me!! ^-^

[silverflame]

First of all, I have no idea how I do it. It didn't even look that good to me when I wrote it. Anyways, thanks Meluivan Indil.

DL, I'm not an expert. I haven't even been writing for very long. I still have quite a bit to learn. And it wasn't referring to Vergil although I guess in a way it could. It was another non-existing guy. I really need to learn to think of something else.

[danteslover]

By my standards, you are. You may as well be, 'cause you're good enough. I knew it probably wasn't. It seemed it though.

[silverflame]

Thank you. I would try publishing some poems but don't have the money. Well, the guy I was thinking of is a lot like Vergil, so it's no surprise.

[danteslover]

You're welcome. If ever you do have the time and the money, give it a shot. I think you could do it. I thought you said it was about somebody who didn't exist.