Ting
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Watashi wa baka desu ka. Hai.
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Post by Ting on Jun 8, 2006 9:46:08 GMT -5
PS. Guys, if you read it. Be as criticising as you can be.
I mostly get things like "Great story, update soon!"
What I'd like to get would be "I like the way the plot flows, but your dialogue seems kind of fake and unrealistic"...you get my drift?
Thanks guys!
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Post by Meluivan Indil on Jun 9, 2006 21:05:35 GMT -5
Well I've read and reviewed the first two chapters so far. I was very concise in my review. I hope I don't sound too brutal. If I do I apoligize. But anyway, I'll read some more when I have a little time later.
M.
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Ting
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Watashi wa baka desu ka. Hai.
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Post by Ting on Jun 11, 2006 15:51:51 GMT -5
Hey, no, I didn't think you were too brutal. Sad thing is, its very true, there actually used to be 3 chapters b/t chapter 1 and 2. When I went to rewrite them, I just couldn't make them good enough for me and I deleted them.
I'm not a big fan of part I, Part II is my baby at the moment. Part I is kind of just the skeleton of what it could be, it needs some meat on its bones.
Thank you for taking the time,
Ting
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Post by Meluivan Indil on Jun 11, 2006 19:05:16 GMT -5
Your very welcome, but I need to read more. It's one of those things in the back of my head. It says, "Hey that story was really getting good, you need to get back to it." Anyway hopefully tonight.
M.
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Ting
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Watashi wa baka desu ka. Hai.
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Post by Ting on Jun 12, 2006 8:50:43 GMT -5
Awesome,
I have to get a move on and get back to writing. I didn't write more than like 5 pages when I was at university. I kicked myself in the a** so many times. So well, I'm writing chapter 19 of part two. I have a lot to write for part II b/c I'm going so much more indepth with it than i have with any other part of the story.
Originally, I wrote what is now Part III first, then decided I needed a prequel to explain some of the background, so I wrote Part I, then I wrote the sequel to Part III (which is part IV), it had begged me to be written haha. Then, I decided that I had to just frickin go ahead and write part II. I had such a writers block on it, but its then most important section of the story, the main event you could say, which triggers all that happens in Part III/IV.
Weird, huh? Wish i had wrote it in the order it should have been wrote in.
Anywho, thanks again,
Ting
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Ting
Junior Member
Watashi wa baka desu ka. Hai.
Posts: 94
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Post by Ting on Jun 12, 2006 15:03:04 GMT -5
Thank you Anime Monster for yur first review!
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Post by Lady Mage on Jun 15, 2006 21:15:12 GMT -5
Hey, Ting? I haven't gotten anything by email as of yet. Should I have? My email is magewhisperer@novicewriters.net. And I can take attachments.
Thank you!
mage
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