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Post by Anime Monster on Apr 4, 2007 13:49:35 GMT -5
You knew I was going to write about this when the contest came up, didn't you? Turbulent Trials
The sky darkens The rain begins to Fall
Black turn to green The sun shows for a Moment
The black abbess of The sky as the sun Hides
The cone of silence Matching the swirling Sky
Dropping lower is The swirling sky of Doom
Touchdown, a landing Dust clouds form Below
Bigger and strong It grows so Powerful
Destroying everything Until everything is Gone
Swirling blackness Receding to the sky Above
Leaving in its wake Nothing, but Survivors
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Post by Lex on Apr 5, 2007 2:58:56 GMT -5
Hmm.... its good, though I don't like the repetition of 'everything' in the eigth paragraph.
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Post by Anime Monster on Apr 5, 2007 13:38:40 GMT -5
It was the only word that allowed me to fit with the form. I could change it to:
Destroying everything Until nothing is Left
now that I think about it...but I think I'll leave it the way it is...maybe later, after this contest I'll publish an edited version using that as the eighth stanza.
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Post by Wyvernwings on Apr 6, 2007 11:41:37 GMT -5
It's lovely, I'm not formilar with that style though. Is it a named or were you just writing it as you thought of it?
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Post by Anime Monster on Apr 6, 2007 12:53:47 GMT -5
It's a freeform poem, but I put constraints that each stanza must be three lines long with the last line being one word and then centered so they kind of look like a tornado.
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Post by Wyvernwings on Apr 6, 2007 19:33:30 GMT -5
Ahh I see. That's cool, so you made it a sort of picture poem.
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Post by Dreamer on Apr 7, 2007 12:20:31 GMT -5
Very good!!! And freeform is one of my favorite to read... though I didn't like the eighth stanza either... But still, it was very good! Nice job!! ~Anna Christie~
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