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[Andrea]

I don't know if you're supposed critique during contests either... hmm... Anywho, I do like this a lot. I feel like it has a lot of potential but I think if you were going to go back and do a few touch ups on it you sould work on the rythem and flow of this piece. It's very choppy and that dsirupts the impression you're trying to give. ;D

[alth]

Hey, thanks for all the comments! Sorry for reply late.

To Lady Mage ( or Virginia),

You are right! I'm your friend in Multiply! I want to thank you for leading me to this side here ( I saw the link in your MUltiply). I have been searching the site to share my works and this side is really cool!

I'm the newbie here and i just started composing poem recently. This is my first created poem. So sorry for the mistakes i made. I will remember the comments i got and try to improve my skill.

Thanks you guys again =)

[Lady Mage]

I'm so glad to have you here! I love to get new members here! And don't worry about the mistakes- we all make them. The best thing to do about them is to learn from them. Now I've finished my lecture, again, I warmly welcome you to the site, and I look forward to seeing more of your works. I like this poem very much indeed.

Lady Mage (Virginia) you can call me either... most people either call me lady or mage here, but Virginia is fine too. ;D

[Lady Idril]

Gorgeous! There's an intensity to it that's very magnetic. I love it