Where have all the Socks Gone

[goofygirl]

OK, please be nice. This is the first original thing I've written in years, so I'm a little rusty. I know there are a few ruff patches. here goes nothing.

"Mum! Where's my other purple sock?" screamed a small red-headed, freckled-faced little girl.

"How should I know, Jaimie," replied the mother as she poked her head into Jaimie's room. "Why don't you wear the blue ones?"

Jaimie rolled her eyes and huffed, "Yeah, like that'll match."

- Next Day -

"Mum! Where's my other green sock?" screamed the red-headed Jaimie.

"How should I know," replied the mother, as she poked her head into Jaimie's room. "Why don't you wear the red ones?"

Jaimie rolled her eyes and huffed, "Yeah, like that'll match."

- Next Day -

"Mum! Where's my other orange sock?" screamed Jaimie

"How should I know," replied the mother, as she poked her head into Jaimie's room. "Why don't you wear the yellow ones?"

Jaime rolled her eyes and huffed, "Yeah, like that'll match."

She shrugged her shoulders and took a better look at her drawer. She discovered that almost all of her socks were missing it's pair. She stood there and scratched her head.

"Jaimie!" screamed her little brother. "Have you seen my train socks? I can only find one."

Jaimie poked her head into her brothers room and said, "no, I haven't. Are any of your other socks missing their pairs?"

He nodded as Jaimie walked into the room. She scratched her head and said, "where have all the sock gone?"

"Mum," screamed Jaimie.

"What is it this time?"

"Someone has been taking all of our socks," Jaimie stated.

"Well, maybe the dog ate them?"

"We don't have a dog, mum," exclaimed Jaimie. She started to scratch her head again.




- the ending is king of shotty, so, I'm going to work on it a bit and post it later -

[Diclonius' Lilium]

The grammar is a bit of a problem. Rough is not spelled R-u-f-f.

The "here" in 'here goes nothing', the "H" needs to be capitalized.

"It's pair" is supposed to be "Its pair"

Brothers in "brothers room" should either be "brother's room" or "brothers' room".

In "Where have all the sock gone?" Sock should be socks.

All in all, corrected it would go like this: (is this allowed?)

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"Mum! Where's my other purple sock?" screamed a small red-headed, freckled-faced little girl.

"How should I know, Jaimie," replied the mother as she poked her head into Jaimie's room. "Why don't you wear the blue ones?"

Jaimie rolled her eyes and huffed, "Yeah, like that'll match."

- Next Day -

"Mum! Where's my other green sock?" screamed the red-headed Jaimie.

"How should I know," replied the mother, as she poked her head into Jaimie's room. "Why don't you wear the red ones?"

Jaimie rolled her eyes and huffed, "Yeah, like that'll match."

- Next Day -

"Mum! Where's my other orange sock?" screamed Jaimie

"How should I know," replied the mother, as she poked her head into Jaimie's room. "Why don't you wear the yellow ones?"

Jaime rolled her eyes and huffed, "Yeah, like that'll match."

She shrugged her shoulders and took a better look at her drawer. She discovered that almost all of her socks were missing its pair. She stood there and scratched her head.

"Jaimie!" screamed her little brother. "Have you seen my train socks? I can only find one."

Jaimie poked her head into her brother’s room and said, "No, I haven't. Are any of your other socks missing their pairs?"

He nodded as Jaimie walked into the room. She scratched her head and said, "Where have all the socks gone?"

"Mum," screamed Jaimie.

"What is it this time?"

"Someone has been taking all of our socks," Jaimie stated.

"Well, maybe the dog ate them?"

"We don't have a dog, mum," exclaimed Jaimie. She started to scratch her head again.

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I did like how Jaimie showed how everyone depends on their mother for finding things.

[rayman112]

Lol, at first look i didn't notice any of the errors that Diclonious(is it all right if i just call you "DL")pointed out but other than the grammer its a pretty good story so far. I liked the color coding

[Wyvernwings]

Wow.... My job was entierly taken by DL (hehe sounds like down low... sorry). Are you going to continue this? As it stands the ending is sort of confusing. You might want to continue it a bit more.

Comprende?

It is a childrens story, and we all know they love happy endings.

[Diclonius' Lilium]

Oh... sorry to do your job for you, Wyvernwings. I really wanted to help (maybe I should have left some errors unsaid)

And, also, I just checked by using Microsoft Word (I'm a cheater, I know)

[rayman112]

ah, i suppose thats one way of doing it.

[scorpiorising]

I liked the story, liked the color coding and didn't notice the error's but that is what makes this site so helpful. I am really waiting to see what happened to all the socks. I had written a children's story "There'a Dragon in my Sock Drawer along the same theme- maybe the Dragon ate them? I really want to know what Mom did with the socks. I agree, it's a good story to prove how kids rely on their other's for the simplest things. Scorpiorising