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Post by Anime Monster on Oct 6, 2005 19:12:03 GMT -5
When I'm in a funk I start writing really bad poetry that makes me cry, this is one of them.
Rating: PG-13
I've forgotten how to smile It's really quite painful I don't know why the dead keep rising All I know is it's not worth crying I've lost the will to live Yet all I can think of how to begin I want it to all go away Day after day after day I know it won't last forever But for now It has gone on forever
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Post by Lady Mage on Oct 29, 2005 14:09:12 GMT -5
This sounds like the book Sabriel by Garth Nix. Well Kinda. I like it, but you were right it does make you cry. If this were paper, there would be little blotches all over it...
magewhisperer
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Post by Anime Monster on Nov 13, 2005 1:40:43 GMT -5
I've never read Sabriel, is it any good? I'll have to check it out. When I typed it there was water on the keyboard.
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Post by alanna on Dec 11, 2005 21:36:14 GMT -5
yes sabriel is a very good book it is in a trilogy Sabriel Liriel Abhorson they r really good LUV A
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Post by StoriesThatNeverWere on Mar 7, 2007 14:55:59 GMT -5
Interesting...
I have read a few of your pieces on here, and you clearly have wonderful talent. However, this poem didn't have your usual flare. It was a bit too simple for me. And the line Yet all I can think of how to begin did not seem to fit because you did not follow up on it.
I hope you don't think me rude; I only mean to help. This may not be your best work, but I still enjoy it nonetheless.
~Song <3
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