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Abyss
Oct 19, 2005 10:15:33 GMT -5
Post by WindbentRose on Oct 19, 2005 10:15:33 GMT -5
A tear came- trickled slowly down her cheek... joining many on the once dry and dusty ground.
With her tears came the rain... and with the rain came new life, except where she needed it in her desert of a heart.
It was her doom- to always weep for the one who had promised her all and given her nothing.
A chasm threatened to tear her apart- she seemed about to fall... looking down in a dizzying manner into the wrong that had done to her.
With every tear, the abyss opened wider that was why they called them tears... they tore you apart... never patching you up again.
It rained on... with every tear the rain fell faster- now everywhere could be seen rushing rivers; except where she needed it... in that desert that had once been her heart.
She was about to fall, teetering on the edge- one more second and she would be no more... out of the darkness, a strong hand pulled her back; she was safe... for the moment.
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Abyss
Oct 19, 2005 12:00:13 GMT -5
Post by alagaesiangal on Oct 19, 2005 12:00:13 GMT -5
ooh... im glad u took mi advice. i luv ur poetry... u should post that 1 about the fish!
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Abyss
Oct 19, 2005 14:52:02 GMT -5
Post by Lady Mage on Oct 19, 2005 14:52:02 GMT -5
Ooh! I love it! You write such good poetry!
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Abyss
Oct 19, 2005 20:10:46 GMT -5
Post by WindbentRose on Oct 19, 2005 20:10:46 GMT -5
Thanks! Wow, this is so exiting getting feedback and stuff! Also, feel free to flame me as well... although I'm not sure whether that's against the rules or not...
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Abyss
Oct 21, 2005 20:01:24 GMT -5
Post by Lady Mage on Oct 21, 2005 20:01:24 GMT -5
I think it is. But I appreciate your open-mindedness to other people's critisism!
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Abyss
Oct 22, 2005 12:46:33 GMT -5
Post by BeautifulDisaster on Oct 22, 2005 12:46:33 GMT -5
Wow. This is really descriptive. It is a beautiful disaster. I'm glad the girl is safe. For the moment, as you said.
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Abyss
Oct 25, 2005 19:44:56 GMT -5
Post by WindbentRose on Oct 25, 2005 19:44:56 GMT -5
I love your penname. Why don't you join?
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