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Post by Ravendust on Feb 27, 2007 16:53:13 GMT -5
This poem I originally started writing for the Poetry contest, but then it got a bit angsty ^_^;; Please divulge your thoughts.
Where hath thy love fled? Where hath thy love fled? I feel such sorrow, I feel such loneliness, I’m so lost without thee, And yet thee continue on thy path of life, As if we had never met, Where hath thy love fled? I once felt so accepted by thee, There was happiness, There was excitement, I feel so alone, My heart is breaking, Where hath thy love fled? What is a secret, That told unto thou, Would vanquish thy words, And crush mine heart to dust, Where hath thy love fled? Such tears find their way out, As much as I struggle to go on, I feel as though the path falters, It shifts and sends me reeling, Where hath thy love fled? Why am I so alone, When once we laughed and cried together, When once thou taught me what life meant, I wish only for thy happiness, Where hath thy love fled? Am I such a disappointment to thee, Such that I am unworthy, Such that I am no longer, Able to feel thy light shining, Where hath thy love fled? Am I disowned unto thee, For how I live my life, Am I such a disappointment, That thou can’t see past my outer shell, Where hath thy love fled? I miss thee, I love thee, I only want thee to see me again, Where is thy compassion, Where art thou?
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Post by Ravendust on Feb 27, 2007 21:37:31 GMT -5
Meh, sorry for that extra centered thing being in there. but for some reason my computer absolutely refuses to let me edit my posts
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Post by Lady Idril on Feb 27, 2007 23:42:06 GMT -5
I fixed it for you, Raven I love this poem, it's so passionate - and sad, yes, but also beautiful. Wonderful job!
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Post by Ravendust on Feb 28, 2007 9:12:42 GMT -5
Thanks ^_^ I don't know why it won't let me modify posts at my house it's frustrating.
I'm glad you liked it, I was in a really... sad mood when I wrote it.
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Post by Lady Idril on Feb 28, 2007 12:50:56 GMT -5
Sometimes the best, most emotional poetry comes out of those moods, doesn't it? But I'm sorry you were sad! If you use Mozilla Firefox it might have something to do with your not being able to edit posts - at least, that's usually mr problem. It says "You have not entered a message" or something, so I just log in with IE to do it.
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Post by Ravendust on Feb 28, 2007 19:34:17 GMT -5
*Blink* Really? Huh...
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Post by iarejedi on Feb 28, 2007 22:17:42 GMT -5
Wow, that was awesome. I don't know why you say you have no talent for poems or whatever it was that one time. But I think it's beautiful.
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