Lady Phoenix
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Post by Lady Phoenix on Aug 6, 2006 17:44:10 GMT -5
I have been waiting For such a long long time To hear the words you speak. Words lacking in emotion As if you didn't care. Does this hurt you at all?
An angry look on your face But I've done nothing wrong At least that is what I thought... But you calmly tell me The love is gone Dead to your heart.
My world has crashed. Light fell into darkness. You want to take everything away You want to tear my world from me. Please don't, I can't... I have no meaning without them
They would have been my reason to keep going My reason to not give up. But you want to destroy me. The world is bleak. The sands of time fall. It won't be long before the last grain has dropped.
The water calls to me. The medicine screams to me... The blade seduces me... Which will win? One of them will... And for you I will die...
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Post by StoriesThatNeverWere on Mar 7, 2007 15:37:33 GMT -5
To be honest, when I first read this I thought it was a bit of a mess. But after reading it over again, I actually love it. What threw me off the first time was the third paragraph. It does not seem to have the same rhythm the other lines do. It was the only paragraph that seemed to lack word choice and effort. Otherwise, I think this was fantastic.
Favorite line:
The sands of time fall. It won't be long before the last grain has dropped.
~Song <3
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