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Flames
Oct 6, 2005 19:15:41 GMT -5
Post by Anime Monster on Oct 6, 2005 19:15:41 GMT -5
Because I don't know where else to put this.
PG
Sitting at your desk Week after week Signing the same documents She insists are important You show more patience Than the fire of your namesake Yet your eyes still contain The flames That alight at your dream Your mission To write the wrongs of your Past
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Flames
Oct 7, 2005 22:21:16 GMT -5
Post by envision on Oct 7, 2005 22:21:16 GMT -5
I dig it. I think word "documents" has different uhm...feel to it than the rest of the poem, maybe "concessions" would be better?
But it's yer poem, not mine. ;D
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Flames
Oct 7, 2005 22:54:34 GMT -5
Post by Anime Monster on Oct 7, 2005 22:54:34 GMT -5
It's just that documents fit better with the inspiration for it, so I used it instead.
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Flames
Oct 9, 2005 15:57:27 GMT -5
Post by envision on Oct 9, 2005 15:57:27 GMT -5
like I say, yer poem not mine *nods*
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Flames
Mar 10, 2007 17:12:23 GMT -5
Post by StoriesThatNeverWere on Mar 10, 2007 17:12:23 GMT -5
Actually, I think documents adds a sudden sophistication to the poem.
Very nicely done. Short and sweet.
Favorite line:
Signing the same documents She insists are important You show more patience
~Song <3
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