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Post by rayman112 on Dec 19, 2008 0:24:56 GMT -5
ok, i hope it's not to late to enter...but here we go. I wrote this poem without having any idea where i was going with this at first it just turned out this way. (if you see any spelling issues feel free to alert me =) ) When I think of you I remember your eyes... I remember the deep intellect that burns behind the bright hues and shades of blue that stare back at me when i look at you, and... your kind smile that's perhaps as beautyful too as the way I veiw the world when I see you and... I feel week inside.
You make a mand nervous like only a woman can do, and I've grown an attraction that goes beyond the physical untrue, and have become enslaved to the impulse of youth which, gave bith to a sexual attraction of the intellecdtual level.
When I think of you... I fall in love again...physically, mentally, spiritually .
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Post by Lady Idril on Jan 25, 2009 1:35:59 GMT -5
This is quite pretty! It's very genuine, very honest. I love it very much! (:
(And because you asked to be alerted for spelling errors: "beautyful" should be "beautiful", "week" should be "weak" and you put a 'd' after "man". Okay, I'm done now!
Great job!
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