Elen

[bluelyra]

I really wasn't sure where to put this, so I decided General would work fine.

Elen

The dog shits in the corner,
but Elen doesn't notice
'cuz her mind isn't there.
There's no elegance in being crazy,
only sadness and dispair.
The kids aren't yet grown,
but they have to raise themselves.
Dirty dishes stack up in the sink.
No one ever told her life was perfect,
but poor Elen alway hoped it would be.
Taxes are unpaid and
the state's comin' to take her away.
She never though it would end like this,
with her alone and insane.


*Note: this is copyright Laura E. L. Please do not copy or use without permission. Thanks and hugs, Laura E. L./BlueLyra. See more of my work on my Allpoetry.com profile (BlueWitch)

[envision]

makes meh sad. But it's very good!! Kudos to thee.

[bluelyra]

Thank you.

[Andrea not logged in]

I feel like there's no flow to this, no rythym. It's all hard edged trasitions instead of the lightly sweeping ones that make poetry beautiful.