Freedom in between

[Lex]

A short (and rather disturbing) poem about breaking free from the bonds society holds on us... I don't expect anyone to like this, its jsut me letting thoughts free.

Freedom in between...

Right, wrong…
Hammers smashing my mind,
Broken thoughts, breaking dreams,
Shattered love cascade…

Brain dead… so true, untrue,
No lies… I don’t understand,
They are here can’t you see!
They found me!

Brick smash thought,
Dead, shatter crunch,
Save me, kill me,
Free me!

All broken…
All gone…
All dead…
All gone…

I’m alive.

[Lady Mage]

Hmm. Good poem but too abrupt an ending.

[Lex]

So you say...

Its written (just remembered inspiration) from the perspective of a man about to throw himself from a cliff. He starts running 'all broken'... and you can guess where he finally jumped.

[Lady Idril]

Fantastic. As usual

[Lex]

Thanks, though this is a weaker poem than ussual.