Divided Highway

[EchoesRemain]

I wrote this poem a long time ago. It's actually pretty much the one and only poem that I've really ever written. I wasn't sure whether or not to put it in the love section or the sadness section. So, if this is wrong, er, sorry.

Divided Highway

Two lanes going westbound
Keep looking for what’s yet to be found
You’re staring out the window
I’m staring at the ground
This silence is driving us crazy

Going west we can’t progress
On the asphalt and cactus
You’re tired of me, I’m trying to find you
We’ve both changed into something new
On this divided highway

Another stop, one more mile
We pull over, I’m in denial
Hands on the wheel, though we’re parked
You get out, I do not follow
I hope you enjoy your freedom

Going west, we can’t progress
Amid the asphalt and cactus
You’re gone from me, that’s something new
I’ve been changed apart from you
On this divided highway

In the light I see your face
How did I make you unhappy?
Gone from you I’ve lost my place
The silence here is still unchanged
You’re hating me, I’m loving you
You’ve moved on

Going west, there’s no progress
Lost on asphalt, in cactus
You’re gone from me, it’s nothing new
Nothing’s changed, I still miss you
Driving on this lonely highway

[Jinks]

I still like this poem. I can remember the first time you showed it to me in English class. Good job, Echoes. I look forward to more.

[Andrea]

I really like this! Though, I think the rhythm is off, and the rhyme-scheme is funny, sometimes it rhymes, sometimes it doesn't and I can't tell if the rhymes are intentional or not. It's definitely a fantastic start.