War That Cannot be Won

[poeticsoul]

Rated T

I fell for you...
Like never before.
I thought you were there beside me,
But I was wrong...
You left before the war had began.
You left before the battle was through.
Now what am I supposed to do?
I've given some of me to you.
How do you expect
To give it back?
You can't just throw it away...
You didn't attempt
To see the commitment 'til the end.
You left me to fend for myself...
Here I stand,
Weakened and alone.
My attempts to win the battle in vain...
For you, my dear, are the endless battle,
Of which I speak so harshly.
I tried to pull us together,
Instead, you pulled us apart...
How am I to win the war,
When you have part of my heart?

[Lex]

I liked it. Two points though;

Don't like the random Rhyme scheme...I consider it jarring....
It should be begun, not began, in line five.

[poeticsoul]

Thanks for the first part. Sorry about that. I wasn't paying attention to where I was rhyming and where I wasn't. Thanks for pointing those things out to me, though. I had begun to start with, but for some reason it didn't look right. OH well, what's done is done. Thanks for commenting!

[Lady Idril]

Very nicely done. I like the ending, it really comes together.

[poeticsoul]

Thank you, Idril!