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Post by danteslover on May 19, 2006 21:40:16 GMT -5
Curse of the YearAnd the gleaming sun did shine, On horizon red; Look upon the sight As if one thousand hearts had bled. Sky colored bight in gold, Splattered by dried blood; Ground shrouded dark with black, Resembled of the flood. Each day I stare Into the eyes of my devil; To the outside I see Those who are his level. Each day I stare Into the eyes of my god; Ever might he stare back Without such hate in Near-black eyes… Season of Damnation, The downfall of rebirth, Come not unto my eyes And come not unto my Earth. For now love’s labour Lay but feet away. Summer time is when My demons like to play… Yet be it but I Who may cry… And the gleaming sun did shine, On horizon red; Look upon the sight, As if one thousand hearts had bled... "... evah ycrem no ym luos, fi uoy dluoc..."You guys didn't tell me there was another contest. Foreshame. This isn't my best, but I kinda did it on a whim. I haven't even read over it myself yet, so don't get mad if it ain't good, 'kay? ;D img147.imageshack.us/my.php?image=sanangelhanddrawn0sb.jpg
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Post by Anime Monster on May 19, 2006 22:09:40 GMT -5
Oh, wow, that's really good. You might want to edit the grammer a bit, but I do love it.
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Post by danteslover on May 20, 2006 9:12:30 GMT -5
Wow, thanks. I really didn't think it was that good. I know the grammar is off, but that's alright. I checked it on my computer and it only showed me how the lines that were the end of the sentence were grammatically incorrect. But still, thanks a lot!
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Post by silverflame on May 20, 2006 16:31:47 GMT -5
I really liked it. It has some interesting imagery. Great job.
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Post by Meluivan Indil on May 22, 2006 12:12:51 GMT -5
Oh wow, dante. Very powerful imagery there. I love it. I love that line 'As if one thousand hearts had bled.' Very powerful.
M.
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Post by danteslover on May 22, 2006 19:30:59 GMT -5
Why, thank you much Meluvian Indil and silverflame! I wasn't too sure of it myself, but I'm glad you guys liked it ^-^. I'm glad you liked imagery too. 'As if one thousand hearts had bled' huh? I kinda liked that when I put it in there too. But I digress... Thanks alot guys; I really didn't think it was that good!
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Post by silverflame on May 24, 2006 3:10:32 GMT -5
Well, surprise, it was that good. You should write more poetry, I hope you have been.
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